What Happens in the Friend-Zone Stays in the Friend-Zone

by IdTakeABulletForYou   Aug 15, 2016


They say I'm not supposed to be
friends with those who're in love with me
but as long as a line's agreed
and it's not passed ... it's fine with me.

Yet on the flip side, I can tell
it would be my personal hell
--and has been, now that I retell--
to have a friend for whom I fell.

It's such a sticky pickle though,
an answer I may never know
as to whether I misbestow
a glimmer of hope within the friend-zone.

It sucks to face drawn out rejection
--though worse to follow misdirection--
leading you to circumspection
every time you're shown affection.

There's no solution in my sight:
I may be wrong, I may be right.
I need a friend like you tonight,
and so this battle has no fight.

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  • 7 years ago

    by Katrina D

    I'm experiencing this now.. I'm in love with my Best friend and he is just keeping me in the friend zone.. I always love your poems. They are all amazing. This is just another one to add to my list of favourites x

  • 8 years ago

    by Bradley Peter

    Hello,

    I think the AAAA rhyming scheme is extremely difficult to achieve convincingly, but I'm glad to see you are experimenting with forms and styles.

    I feel, at least for me, that this rhyming scheme distracted from what was being said. I felt it was shadowing the emotions.

    II feel the last line in the third stanza was too long next to the line before it. I don't wish to tell you how to change your work - nor do I believe I'm an expert.

    I particularly enjoyed the language of the fourth stanza, especially the rhymes. The were more of a stretch, and thus, more interesting. I think, as readers and writers, we read so many of the same rhymes: 'one' 'none', 'hope' cope', 'day' 'dismay'. It is our job to elevate. Elevate ourselves, the reader, the art form. We must challenge ourselves and each other. you've done that here in your fourth stanza with your rhymes, and in the poem with your rhyming scheme.

    Regards,

    Bradley

    P.S. Please comment and vote honestly on every piece you read.

  • 8 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    A great write on a subject that definitely causes a conundrum in most. Love the rhyming and light conversational way its presented. Milly x

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    I'll come back and comment in full.

    Hi S I'm back to comment fully and my goodness I've wrote 2 long comments and then they've cleared so hopefully 3rd time lucky. I like the rhyming and the content as many of us can relate to this piece. I can feel the emotion within it pouring out.

    I was going to split this up and give my insight but I can't. All I can say is that friends that we are 'in love' with are always going to be a piece of us because they were friends first and other feelings were added. I do believe that they will be held in our hearts even if we never speak again.

    I'm not sure if I've got it right at all or if I'm misinterpreting.

    All in all, great write.
    Em

  • 8 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    I get this... a thousand times over!

    Love the easy flow and rhyme that makes it more conversations and like you're mulling over in your mind what to do. I've go back and forth between it. Sometimes, it's easier to be with that person and you can value that they're still present in your life, even as a friend. Other times, it gets more tough on the heart when that hurt is hiding beneath the surface.

    Take care :)

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