Comments : Unrest

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hello and welcome to the site.

    An engrossing poem that's certainly dark. Well rhymed and fluent throughout. Keep writing,

    SL

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Michael, welcome to P&Qs.
    This is a great poem by you and though, it is a rather sad one it's an enthralling write.
    The rhyming is spot on and I feel the fluency in the piece makes it a lot easier for the reader to read.

    Well done on a fabulous write,
    Em

  • 8 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Nominated!

  • 8 years ago

    by Michael Morbid

    Thank you all kindly, I appreciate your replies and ratings. I'm rather new to this. The first three lines were floating around in my head for around twenty years, and recently I finally got around to (un)fleshing it out.

  • 8 years ago

    by Brenda

    Wow! What an engrossing write! Everything just flows beautifully. Nicely rhymed and the story line was really cool. Well done-looking forward to reading more of your work.

  • 8 years ago

    by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

    Hello,
    very thrilling I guess... It made my bone chill and gave some goosebumps....
    good job.
    keep on writing
    Gel

  • 8 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Nicely flowing, compelling read. Loved it. Milly x

  • 8 years ago

    by Dean Kuch

    It's never an easy thing to discover that your spouse is having an affair. In fact, it is one of the most helpless, despondent feelings I feel one can go through in life, shy of being told you have a terminal illness.

    Your poem captures the angst and bitterness of such a betrayal quite well.
    ~Dean Kuch