by Ben Pickard
Good God, man, this is an immense write in every way. The rhyming and syllable count are spot on throughout (I use eight syllables per line a lot myself) and the story is engrossing and tragic all at once. |
by Mr. Darcy
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by Maple Tree
Many times when we write of the past, the emotion oozes out and creates a top notch emotional and heart gripping poem.. ugh I cried with this poem, just got me! |
by Em
I'm lost for words what a sad but honest piece. |
by Brenda
Stephen, I'm blown away-this is incredibly sad and beautifully written. I can't even begin to describe how many emotions ran through me and still are after reading this. Well done! |
Good work S |
Thank you all! |
Incredibly emotional and visual poem. So strong and really touches a note. Milly xx |
by Vicente
I've been away from all of you guys, especially you my Turtle King, but this is the kind of work that makes me roil with emotion. I like how you keep mystery in the words, but the experience of regret and pain transfers to whomever is reading them. I can't offer much on constructive criticism because I love how you did this. I hope that, if this is an actuality of your life, you can find calm waters to let your regrets be cooled and healed. |
Beautiful and saddening. You know a work is great when it makes you feel such emotions strongly. This was an excellent piece and definitely a new favorite! |
Hello, |