Comments : Reflash

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hello Skyler

    This is a very moving poem indeed, not least because the reader never quite knows what happened to this person. Is this simply a case of love gone wrong (heart-breaking enough) or has there been some sort of tragedy? It's perfectly ambiguous.
    When someone we care about so much suddenly isn't there anymore, it's the little things that hurt the most: hair in a brush or a 'bobby pin' left on the side.
    I will nominate this when my votes are recharged later.

    SL

    • 8 years ago

      by Skyler

      Thank you. I had to exorcise something. I'm glad you found something intriguing in the ambiguity. It's true what they say, that when you write something and other people read it, it doesn't belong to you anymore.

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Skyler, what a touching piece about lost love and the woes of it.
    I believe anything that reminds us of a person that we love and have lost can trigger off our sadness, something so simply as that 'bobby pin.'

    A sad but truthful, heart felt piece.

    Em

    • 8 years ago

      by Skyler

      Trigger is a good word for it, I think. The smallest piece of a big thing that sets it all off.

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Well done on front page, congratulations

  • 8 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Congratulations!!!!

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Well done on this, Skyler.

  • 8 years ago

    by Brenda

    Nicely done! Congrats on your win. It is amazing how one little thing can trigger so many thoughts and feelings. Well done-

  • 8 years ago

    by Skyler

    Thank you all!

  • 8 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Judging Comment:

    As heartrending as this piece is, it appears to be highly relateable and extremely moving when the end reveals that something SO simple as a bobby pin could drive a soul so mad. Lately a lot of artists have found symbolism or intense meaning in a bobby pin or even a few stray ones between couch cushions or left on the bathroom sink - but this one completely blew me away. There is style in its own, cleaver way. This piece is just picturesque enough to understand and yet simple enough that anyone can put their own story to it. Wonderfully potent write!

  • 8 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Judging Comment

    This unique love poem is so creative and elegant! I adore the ending and admire the word usage to create the mood. The ending line just got me!

  • 8 years ago

    by CRAFTY KEN

    Great work Skyler, really touched my heart, loved it's simplicity, the twisted hairpin still stuck to the memories, you write as a man after my own heart.

    Nominated

    Ken