Hi Erica,
Firstly, I'd like to say with regards to the title how about something like 'positivity is paramount.'
Secondly, I like this piece because its inspiring and go es good advice to the reader that we need to be positive in times od hardships though easier said than done. We all need to move on once in our lives and in doing so keep our heads held high.

Though I like this piece I feel it could be tweaked because of the repetition of the word 'when' as it seems to make the flow go abit off balance. So, here is my suggestion and remember it is only that.

When
everything is crumbling around you
you're on the edge barely holding on
you cry daily without ever shedding a tear
your screams are constant but somehow no one can ever hear
the smile you wear daily starts to crack and fall

When you're barely holding on....

What do you do?

You go on daily, with a positive attitude. You strive to make life as grand as possible even though it doesn't seem to be working. You push forward and stand tall without ever falling.

All in all, great poem, Em

So very true, you go on. Each day will get better, each day you will get stronger. A very inspiring write-

Life can take such turn of darkness. It's very possibly that this kind of stuffs could happen in anyone's life. And very soon we fell into the frustration and sadness. We things doesn't go well.... we all just keep on accepting the sun to rise but instead of that the night grow much darker.

We should keep on trying, so that we can see the new sun of life.

Nice poem.