It's Just Me Saying Goodbye

by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist   Aug 27, 2016


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I love you and you know it's true
saying goodbye is hard to do
I think of it a thousand times
It makes my heart shamble so many times...

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We have shared this special relationship
We survived to those trials and hardships
But now I don't know what will happen
As I see everything will end.

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As I wrote this poem my heart cried
Even my tears they won't dry
Maybe I've lost someone like you
And I don't know if you like it too..

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Thank you for the moments we've shared
Remember, my heart is not full of hatred
So happy in those days I'm with you
And I'm thankful for everything you do.

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Now as we parted our ways
Bear in mind that I have loved you in so many ways
Whenever you see birds flying in the sky
It's just me saying goodbye.

Author's note:

All of my compositions are labor of love, hurt, and pain..
Originally made from my own Experiences.
A copyright not a copycat.

Gel

All rights reserve: March 7, 1999-2016

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  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    This is a beautiful yet sad poem.
    It's always difficult to say goodbye isn't it.

    A few suggestions:

    * I love you and you know it's true
    saying goodbye (is) hard to do
    I think of it a thousand times
    It makes my heart shamble (crumble) many times...

    * We have shared this special relationship
    We survive(d) to those trials and hardship(s)
    But now I don't know what will happen
    As I see everything will end..
    ^^
    ^
    I think in the second line you need to take out the 'to' and has happen and end don't rhyme and you've rhymed in couplets I think maybe the third line could be changed to something like 'now, I begin to break and bend'

    * As I wrote this poem my heart cried
    Even my tears they wont dry
    Maybe I'll lost (lose) someone like you
    And I don't know if you like it too..
    ^^
    Maybe the fourth line could read..
    'and I don't know what I should do'

    * Thanks for the moment(s) we shared
    Remember, my heart is not full of hatred
    So happy in those (the) days I'm with you
    And I'm thankful for everything you do..
    ^
    Maybe the second line could read..
    'remember, my heart will always care'

    * Now as we parted our ways
    Bear in mind that I have loved you in so many ways
    Whenever you see birds flying in the sky
    It's just me saying goodbye..

    All in all great piece.
    Em

    • 8 years ago

      by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

      Hi Em ,

      yes Em, it's hard to say goodbye specially when you still love each other ..The reason was we need to obey our parents first....(high school life)(1999) :) my old poem .. I'll take some of your suggestions..thank you so much Em

      Gel

  • 8 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello Gel,

    as requested,

    Suggestions:

    * I love you and you know it's true
    saying goodbye (so) hard to do
    I think of it a thousand times
    It makes my heart shamble for so many times...
    ^delete 'for'

    * As I wrote this poem my heart cry (cried)
    Even my tears they wont dry
    Maybe I'll lost someone like you
    And I don't know if you like it too(?)

    * Thanks for the moment we shared
    Remember, my heart is not full of hatred
    ^hatred doesn't rhyme with 'Shared' maybe use care?

    I'm so happy in those days I'm with you
    ^delete the word 'I'm'
    And I'm thankful for everything you do..

    All the best,

    Michael

  • 8 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    ...this is such a sad poem. Saying reluctant goodbyes are never easy. A torn heart is never the same again .

    All the best.

    Michael

    • 8 years ago

      by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

      Hi,

      thank you Mr. Darcy . Your comment means a lot. .any suggestions sir, or corrections?

      thanks
      Gel

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