Hello Michael,

A lovely tight rhyming (a,b,a,b) biblical based poem here.

It seems humankind is intent on sin; ignoring lessons from the past. War only serves for spilling blood, beating man into submission. Surely we know better that an eye for eye means poor sight for everyone!

I have a couple of suggestions, I hope you don't mind.

2nd verse, last line: change 'needs' for 'needed'

4th verse, 3rd line: adding the word 'on' between 'dirt' and 'his' may improve the flow.

Michael, a lovely poem with an important message to us all.

Take care,

Michael

Hello,

I'm not very familiar with Cain and Abel, other than I know they're in the Bible - and I think they were brothers - so I'm not able to get much of a connection (that is my fault), but the poem itself did feel like it was important, and something I should know. There was an epic-ness - for want of a better word - to it. It felt like advice. Few poems do, and I really enjoyed that aspect of it.

Regards,

Bradley

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