A touch of innocence (collaboration)

by Mr. Darcy & Maple Tree   Aug 30, 2016


A mystical mirage of emotion
silences waves, that crash over
thousand year old rocky shores.

Salty air shapes his thoughts
as sea crabs gather in unison:
scurrying soldiers on the sand.

Prawn-like legs fold away,
hovering over a reflective
crystal pool of possibilities.

Micro worlds within a world,
existing beneath the tension
building up out of curiosity.

Tiny talons poke about
as pebbles sway with bodily ease.
A finger of quivers explode with
anticipation from a curious little
warrior, such as he.

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  • 7 years ago

    by stormingdance (Lessa)

    Beautiful word play and imagery. Congrats on the win, yall!

  • 7 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    Breathtakingly beautiful. Two hands, one heart.

  • 7 years ago

    by AngelaLuisaCory

    It's beautiful. Truly beautiful. So difficult to be in synch with someone else when writing a poem, so well done. Loved it. Angie X

  • 8 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Judging Comment:

    Without the notation that there were two author's for this piece I never would have guessed there were. The voices blend together seamlessly and the style is incredible much like the word choice and level of vocabulary. While I will point out that the descriptions were a little shaky from time to time this pair definitely made up for that with their on point phenomenal use of each other skill. Perhaps it was only shaky in my opinion as well, so that is always something to keep in mind. The second stanza is really where this started to leave the page and become a true creation of its own - a movie or a painting or some other work of art to each individual within the audience, but no matter the form, the execution was spot on wonderful. Absolutely fantastic piece from a purely dynamic duo.

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    A very worthy win guys, Congratulations

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