Hello Marc

An interesting poem here about family dynamics and how misleading they can be.
If anyone is to blame in these scenarios, it's probably the parents (often unwittingly) and yet it's much easier to blame the one who receives all their attention as they are the focus of all the success and what we envy.

Funny, then, that years on that very same person can be the one that was looking out for us all along...

Ben

This seems like a very sincere and clear poem. You've conveyed your feelings and relationship to your sister very clearly in prose. I like it and the topic because it's something that I think a lot of people can really relate to. One suggestion I have it that you try and paint a picture. There are a lot of opportunities here where you can "show" instead of "tell." I think this could really help move your piece along and captivate your audience even further. Another suggestion is that you write about specifics to try and make the poem more personal. What does it mean to triumph over her accomplishments, for instance? What does this look like? What would you do, or what have been her accomplishments? How can you dive deeper in descriptions like "fill my cold heart with warm love"? How can you describe this in such a way that will captivate your audience and really paint a picture? These are just a few examples.

I really love the realization of the powerful poem