Hello,

Rather a fun, little piece. The use of 'Twas', and in fact, the entire first line set up the jolly tone immediately. I'm sure you're aware that most people will instantly think 'Twas the night before Christmas', which, for most people, will already put joy in their hearts.

I felt your first four stanzas were the strongest - perhaps because being from the UK, I know little of American football (if that's in fact to what you were referring) - but also, because the first four were more about life and had a sense of mortality.

I think that your ending was quite strong, too. Ended on a high, giving us the image of this 'big kid', who will tomorrow have to return to the world of an adult.

Regards,

Bradley

Thanks for the reply! This was a 100% guys poem about playing Fantasy Football over the years. My wife thinks its childish, however I've found that things that keep us young w/ our friends are things that you never want to let go of.

This was a really enjoyable, fun read about wanting to go back to the youth of playing footie (or any sport) without wives and kids getting on your toes lol and I tell you what is women can do a lot of that though I do enjoy watching football and rugby.

Em