Comments : Between I Love You And Goodbye

  • 8 years ago

    by Ezeani Sunday

    Good read!!! I love every bit of the poem but I am so much intrigued by the Stanza four.

    • 8 years ago

      by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

      Hi,

      thank you for reading.I wrote this piece Year 2005 and never move on that time.We already part ways years ago (1999) .. Then I found my true love 2006 and finally moved on .. I just want to post it here because of one good reason -> Just sharing, just in case someone might relate to this piece.

      thanks again.

      Gel

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hello Gel,

    It's so difficult when we realise that someone doesn't feel the same way about us as we do about them. And if we discover that there is someone else, well, that just damns the situation further, doesn't it?

    Great write,

    Ben

    • 8 years ago

      by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

      Yes,it is Ben. I'm glad I already found my true love in the persona of my husband and I will never feel the way I felt before.

      thanks for the time reading this Ben

      Gel

  • 8 years ago

    by Augustus Black

    Hi,

    You have written this love topic in a very lovely way. I like the theme and your imaginary mind.

    But I would like to correct you some points:

    Here, in the second line -
    You want to escape someone who hurt herself for you every day

    I think the word, "from" is missing here between escape and someone. Sans that word the true meaning of that line is not coming forth.

    It should be -
    You want to escape from someone who hurt herself for you every day

    Fifth line - A comma is missing after greatest love.

    So, you have pained this good write in a very blissful way with lots of loving emotions. Hope your love will come back.

    All the best. 5/5