College Days (Form - Senryu)

I can see you were obviously studying hard at the time of writing this ;) it's good to see a sense of humour put fourth in poetry. Perfect little narration of what makes school/college more bearable.

Augastus, I enjoyed this.

I do agree with senryu on the blue-eyed part as I was going to suggest that too.

Great work though, Em

Great little senyru, though I do have a couple of suggestions:

"Blue eyes girl smiles at me; bliss"
^instead of blue eyes try blue-eyed.

&

"bell rings in my heart."

try "bells ring in my heart"

Hi there Augustus,

this is a nice piece. .It's a crush crush thingy. ..Great Senryu :)

Gel

Great little senryu, Augastus. Well done on this,

Ben