You Surrender

Of course I understand. You don't have to change any just thought I would suggest a few things.

Have a great day :)

Gel, as Ben already said you are writing some wonderful love poetry atm and its nice and refreshing to see that each of your pieces are uniquely done but fabulous all the same.

For so many times I acted unwisely
You didn't see it tearing me softly
I thought no one could ever rule me
But look, I surrender so Quickly
^^
Lovely opening as we can all relate to turning a blind eye especially when we love somebody but it still tears us up when they hurt us again. The only suggestion is heave here is for the first line.. My suggestion is removing the 'for' so it reads
"So many times I acted unwisely"
Or
Leaving the for in and maybe putting something like...
"for all the times I acted unwisely" its just I feel that for and so together put the flow off a little, only a suggestion though.

Telling me you love me bring me hope
It's your heart, what I'm wishing for
Even that you don't love me anymore
I'll never stop loving you mi amor.
^^
I like this stanza the most especially the ending though I have a few suggestions just to keep the flow...
"Telling me you love me bring(S) me hope
It's your heart, (THAT) I'm wishing for
Even (WHEN) you don't love me anymore
I'll never stop loving you mi amor.
^^
Brackets are the edits.

When (The) time comes I feel our love come crashing down (And)
(I'LL) just hold you tighter (,) closer (IN) my arms
(THEN) it's time for you to say It's over
I'll say "OK" I love you, but you surrender.
^^
A powerful ending here.
Again the brackets are suggestions.

I hope you don't mind. Em

Hello Gel

You really are writing some wonderful love poetry at the moment that is genuinely moving.
Nice, tight stanzas and well written throughout.

Take care,

Ben