Andrea this is such a sombre piece yet beautifully written. The images are so vivid.
It's a bitter lemon
upon a tongue
that prefers
sweet chocolate,
^^
Love, love, love this part.

Em

Andrea,

I think this will give me nightmares tonight, damn you. This literally sent shivers up and down my spine as I read, lol
As ever, your writing is full of ridiculously good imagery which is genuinely a joy to read.

All the best,
Ben

Without meaning to sound too abstract - this poem sounds/feels delicate. As though it is a flower and if you were to reach out and touch it, its petals would fall off. You (seemingly) effortlessly captured a sense of fragility and your metaphors are just precious. I love this to pieces.

Also, night shade is the name of a very effective pokemon move. This pokemon (haunter) used to appear in recurring nightmares I had as a child. For me, it adds an element of darkness to this piece. You probably never played pokemon so that wouldn't make sense but I wanted to add that in there ;)

Amazing write.

Quick question, which iris did you mean, the goddess, color, flower, or the eye? They all work, but I"m just curious as to which one you meant.

I really enjoyed this piece. :)

That makes more sense, it ties in with the 'night shade eyes' part & 'wilted flower'. I agree, it's central to this piece. Thank you for clearing that up!

Beautiful... I love in particular the metaphor

"It's a bitter lemon upon a tongue
that prefers sweet chocolate"
Milly x

Andrea, such a hauntingly beautiful yearning write-your visuals lend to such a story. Just lovely-