I am done

by deeplydesturbed   Sep 27, 2016


A cold shiver shakes me to my core
Tries to knock on my hearts door
My stomach falls down to the floor
Why do you even care anymore?

I'm broken, can't be fixed
Your feelings must really be mixed
I don't know why your so transfixed
Please leave before the next eclipse.

Scars from ankles up to my neck
In a huge world a tiny spec
Please let me stay a fleck
Let me go back to being a wreck

Yes i care and love you
But do you realise what I do
I slice i cut i am always blue
I'm the dog shit on someone's shoe.

Self value - i have none
Always keep a distance - so i run
I'm never any fun
Go away and let my life be done

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  • 8 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hi Naomi,

    I'm sorry you're feeling this way. It's awful to feel like you have no self worth. You've described these feelings well in a rhyme scheme that catches the readers attention.

    Naomi, you do have self worth - shed loads! !!

    Take care,

    Michael xx

    • 8 years ago

      by deeplydesturbed

      Thank you Michael for the lovely comment and taking the time to read.

      Im glad i capture it nicely.

  • 8 years ago

    by Brenda

    Naomi, I am going to tell you the same thing I have told Em. You are special, you are a worthwhile person. You are also here fore a reason. That reason may have not made itself clear yet but it's out there. The people who hurt you are not worth your time or energy. It takes a whole lot more to live in this world than to chuck it all and call it quits. You are stronger than you think or give yourself credit. So to heck with the haters, stay strong, hold your head up and live your life! Hugs to you-

  • 8 years ago

    by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

    Hi Naomi,
    this is a sad poem and I do feel you... sometimes life give us problems and give us the best solution...I know you are a tough girl.
    About your poem, this a brilliant astute write...the hurt and the feelings comes out... and also the rhyming is perfect.it's a WOW

    well done 5/5

    Gel

    • 8 years ago

      by deeplydesturbed

      Thanks gel :) for taking the time to read and comment. Im glad you enjoyed

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    It's always a pleasure. Here if needed

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Naomi, Naomi, Naomi when we hurt so much and its all we know we don't feel good enough for anything else but believe me girl you are good enough. These people that hurt us aren't remorseful and they should be but then again haven't thru made us stronger regardless of what we think? Yes, we may hurt but we are strong, you are strong.
    Keep your head above the water and you won't go far wrong.

    Em
    Edit: anckle is without the 'c'

    • 8 years ago

      by deeplydesturbed

      Edited. Thanks for reading and commenting. Always appreciated.

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