I just loved this-beautifully written-

This is awesome, I love how it flows and your word choice is spot on.

The finish though.

"i can feel you changing
my bone density. "

^^^
Genius.

Ether, this is absolutely stunning. I love your word choice and the short, sharp sentences. They mean alot to you (I feel) and many of us can definitely relate when that certain person stays in our memory forever even if we don't want them there and nothing inparticular sets us off.

Em