Hello Zoe and welcome to the site,

A sad tale here but written in excellent, unforced rhyme.

Well done, keep writing and all the best,

Ben

Zoe, welcome! I liked this a lot, flowed beautifully and told a nice story-well done-Brenda

Hi Zoe,

Welcome to the site... nice piece..simple and catchy. ... just like your name. .A name that I love. ..Zoe is the name of my daughter too

Gel

Zoe.
Firstly, welcome to the site.

Secondly, what a beautiful yet sad tale of how things can go so rubbish in life. My advice is keep your head above the water, that's the hardest part.

Em