Naomi, there's nothing worse than not being able to fall asleep. Sometimes our minds just refuse to shut down. Nice little senryu describing just that. hugs- Brenda

Hello Naomi

As you know, I am no stranger to the late night frustrations of being unable to sleep and you have conveyed those feelings well in a senryu here.
All I would say from a technical point is that I have often been told by people far more knowledgeable than I about the subject that you shouldn't repeat words in such short forms as no space should be wasted. Here, the problem is easy to fix, I would imagine.

Second line: Why am I not sleeping THEN

'then' replaces the 'now', thus preventing the repetition.

Up to you, of course, but either way, a nice little write.

Tale care.

I seem to be asking myself the same thing.
insomnia is a b I t c h though I reckon yours is more worry recently with recent events.

Em

I personally love and adore sleepless, late nights.. Its the best time to write for me.

I truly love small poems, they have depth and a ton can be said in a few lines.

this was a joy to read!!