Comments : The Rival (tanka)

  • 8 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    I love this write Larry, the scales of love can at times be finely balanced.

    Wonderful writing as always!

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hello Larry,

    I think if we can look upon a rival in love with some compassion - with all the raging jealousy and frustration that usually accompanies having one - then we are much the better for being able to do so.
    After all, if they are the ones not chosen, living must somehow go on, as you say and surely a little sympathy must then be felt!

    Take care,

    Ben

  • 8 years ago

    by Brenda

    A very nice tanka, loved the subject matter. It's not easy being the one not chosen. I agree with Ben, a little compassion for the other.

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Larry, this is a powerful piece that I guess if we can't relate to now then we will someday.
    Many people may love us but I feel if we choose the right one then we will be fine.
    Reminds me of the quote: If you love two people choose the second because if you loved the first you wouldn't want for the second (or something like that) I know this is completely different as its not being in love with two people but two people loving that special person though I guess it's hard because you will always feel like you are competing, I know I did when I found out my friend felt strongly for one of my exes.

    Fantastically written, Em

    • 8 years ago

      by Larry Chamberlin

      Thanks all. This was written upon awakening from a dream. Most of it was already "in" the dream.