First let me preface this comment with the fact that I find it immensely intriguing that you decided to do this double acrostic, it's relatively hard to pull off in a way that actually makes sense and is pleasant to read so kudos to you on that little feat. (:

I also appreciate the fact that you're writing about chaos & peace, the duality that governs humanity & nature, without getting too philosophical and going off on a tangent, I think life is meant to experience both as if it were regulated by a pendulum, you cannot appreciate peace without knowing chaos, and endure chaos without knowing peace will ensue. This piece feels a bit nihilistic, but I'm starting to digress.

"Caught in the chaos of that biological pumP."

^ Not sure if you meant to have the last letter capitalized or not, I understand why if you it was intentional, but just wanted to point it out. I'm assuming you meant heart by 'biological pump', the fact that you preceded it with 'that' is interesting, since it comes off belittling, rendering it insignificant (I mentioned how this piece came off a bit nihilistic, this reinforced that thought).

"hollow eyes carry no sense of space or time,
accompanied by thoughts in a cappella.?

The imagery of the first verse comes off a bit stereotypical of someone depressed/ 'zombie-esque' just wandering with no real sense of anything. This reinforces why I think this piece feels nihilistic, but I found the next verse to be a bit of an oxymoron; the capella of thoughts seems to be the (peace in all of this chaos), or more appropriately, has the potential for it. It ties in nicely with the duality theme you've constructed in this piece.

"oceans governed by the greater zodiac
surge through my veins, offering little peace."

I like how you ended off with the word 'peace' feels a bit full-circle. It ends on a bittersweet note, like the pendulum stopped abruptly in the dead-center.

I really love this piece, it's short but deep. Nominating this.

Wow, I missed this one. Incredibly difficult and clever. As Senryu said, Kudos!

Congratulations.

I like Michael missed this and I'm. Glad it was nominated and won as its definitely worthy of the front page.

All the best, Em

Congratulations on your win! A beautiful double acrostic. Well done-

This is a fantastic write congratulations on the win it deserves to be highlighted!

Ether ,

you are clever. .. you make a difficult form

TO

Gel

Double acrostic...cleverly penned and crafted.
Congrats on the Win!

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Hats off to Ether!! for pulling off a double acrostic with ease...
I personally always hard a hard time with these..

The flow is detailed and fits.. not choppy.. just right!

a universal angle of elegance!!