Tears in my Cookie dough

Judging Comment:

This piece is very interestingly put together. The rhymes feel a little unnatural at times, but personally it feels like that adds to the writing's unique pull. The style is common, but even that seems to make this all the more interesting. The author's voice shines here and the lacking punctuation really does add a feel like chunks of chocolate or nuts in the cookie dough - so that was a cool touch.

Interesting and very well crafted too! Its the cookie dough that caught my attention and it was worth the read :)

I liked this one so much

Milly, what a beautiful sad write. Your rhymes were spot on and the story you tell flows just right. I can just see you trying to make cookies and crying away-darn men! Well done-Brenda

Milly a fab inspirational poem here as Michael said its significant as the dough will ruin with extra salt from the tears. I like the aaba etc rhyming as I haven't seen that much recently and you executed it well.

All the best, Em