Comments : Who are you?

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Brenda,

    This is a cutting and damn truthful piece of poetry with a subject matter that I could rant about for ages, lol. We are not accepting but what we are is a bunch of hypocrites.
    I had this conversation with my wife the other day. How many times (for example) do you hear 'I don't mind homosexuals as long as they keep it away from me' - How on earth is that any kind of acceptance?
    Racism, sexism, homophobia etc are as prevalent now as they have been for years (in my opinion)

    ANYWAY... as to the poem's technical qualities. I love the use of subtle rhyme employed throughout this piece. 'distrust' and 'judge', 'lot' and 'not' and 'differences' and 'traditions'. All very subtle - barely even half rhymes - but that is what gives the piece a lovely flow and unforced feel.

    Excellent write,

    Ben

    • 8 years ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you so much Ben! Sadly it is true, we are a bunch of hypocrites. I think.we judge and don't even realize we are judging just off of first looks. I'm really glad you liked this. Hugs-

  • 8 years ago

    by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

    Hi Brenda,

    Ben's said it all..my comment is "Truth slaps" people judge people on how they look.

    (So who are you
    to judge?
    -
    When you have never walked
    a day,
    in their shoes...)

    for me these lines stand out the most..

    5/5 for this

    GEL

    • 8 years ago

      by Brenda

      Gel, thank you so much for your kind words. I would love to be able to say I don't judge but unfortunately I would be lying if I did. I do find as I have gotten older I have become a lot more open and hopefully more understanding of my fellow human. I am a work in progress....take care-

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Brenda what a fabulous piece from just the title.. I would never have thought to write something as unique and delicate as this.
    I loved the subtle rhyming throughout the piece as it added that extra something to the piece.

    A honest wrote here which we should lol heed.

    Em

    • 8 years ago

      by Brenda

      Em, thank you so much! I really appreciate your thoughtful comments. I agree, we all need to heed this, lol.

  • 8 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello Brenda,

    excellent question, well put.

    Who are we to judge anyone? Are we so perfect, so untainted? I think not!

    Difference is what makes this world special and sustainable. Live and let live.

    Here I go with a personal judgement:

    You may want to add a line space or two after, "set those wheels in motion"
    ^
    this will (in my judgement) allow the reader to contemplate the question just posed.

    Well done and take care,

    Michael

  • 8 years ago

    by Augustus Black

    I like this write and I'm totally agree with you. Who are we to criticize other traditions and culture. Although I think it's good for anyone to understand different cultures of the world. I like Japanese and Chinese cultures. I want to learn Japanese language, and I know little bit Tagalog(Philippines) language.

    • 8 years ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you! I totally agree with you, I think learning different cultures is a much better way of understanding another person and perhaps not judging because things make more sense. Knowledge goes a long way. I wish you the best in your studies!

  • 8 years ago

    by Augustus Black

    *Sorry It was mistake*

    • 8 years ago

      by Brenda

      It's cool :)