Comments : I Want To Hear It From You (Senryu Form)

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Perfect, Gel. You don't often see love senryu, so this is nice to read.
    All I would suggest going forward is that you try not to repeat the title in the main body of the poem simply because the form is so short and repetition should be avoided if possible. (so I have been told by much more knowledgeable people than me)

    Take care and well done,

    Ben

  • 8 years ago

    by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

    OK Sir Ben I will do that. ..Thank you... just carried away with the poem. .hahaha

    Gel