Gel. I like this and its got a powerful message behind it. I think if we ll loved the universe, earth etc then we wouldn't go far wrong.

Em

This is so sweet, and a perfectly executed form.
However, I interpreted it differently to what you meant by this. So my first thought was to agree with Em's comment.

My interpretation of this piece is that you regretted throwing your love out in to the literal universe. Perhaps capitalising "Universe" or saying "my universe" rather then "the universe" would get rid of the minor confusion. Just a thought.

Regardless, this is a precious peace and well worth a 5/5!

Amen to that statement! This packs a lot of power in those few words, well done-

Well done Gel!
Excellent work! Isn't is sad when we make someone our whole universe and they make decisions which in turn have us question ourselves!

I hope it all works out and you no longer see it as a mistake, but the greatest thing you could do..

I liked this very much and it was my understanding that To my universe meant the man who you considered your universe.

So much can be read into those three simple yet emotionally complex lines. An excellent Senryu

Milly x