Loving you-losing you (Acrostic)

by Brenda   Oct 18, 2016


Loving you is so easy,
of all the people out there, how could I be so
very lucky to be
included in your inner circle?
Now, I know, I'm not the usual
girl you would even look at.
You usually go for those
obviously gorgeous model types.
Until now, how lucky am I?
-
Losing you is so painful-
Of course I blame myself!
Silly girl, you are obviously not
in the same league!
Nothing about you
gives off that "wow" factor-
You are nothing! What were you thinking
of? You aren't very pretty, in fact you are quite
ugly! No wonder you lost him!

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  • 7 years ago

    by Beautiful Tragedy

    This is perfect <3

    • 7 years ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you so much! I appreciate your kind words-

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hello Brenda.

    I like this a lot. You start of congratulating yourself, almost - amazed that this 'perfect' person could ever possibly consider you, and then it suddenly turns much darker. You then go on to berate yourself for ever believing it could have worked after having lost him.

    A sad write, Brenda, but one that is relevant all too often, I feel.

    Ben

    • 8 years ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you Ben, exactly what I was going for...:)

  • 8 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    What a wonderful peace that captures so much emotion that is felt by many. Milly x

    • 8 years ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you so much Milly!

  • 8 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Brenda, this is excellent!! I love the voice you use in this, it speak of so many private emotions...almost like a diary of sorts. (i've read the comments below and very glad this isn't you right now)
    Very Ernest and kinda gritty at the same time, wonderfully written!

    • 8 years ago

      by Brenda

      Ben, thank you so much! I deeply appreciate your comments. Take care-Brenda

  • 8 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Brenda, you've captured the inner 'high and low' dialogue of a young women. Reading this clever acrostic form reminds me of similar poems, but yours I feel is for all those damaged souls out their needing a love that they can rely on and certainly deserve.

    • 8 years ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you Michael! I was channeling every hurt possible to put this together. I'm so glad you liked this! Take care-Brenda

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