Beautiful written by such a telling tell.

Hugs, Em

Hello, Andrea

These forms are so hard to pull off. Not only are there repeated end rhymes, but also repeaten whole lines. When written well, the outcome has a song like quality, with beat and lovely refrains.

I have one suggestion I'd like to offer. To my ear, if you use the word, 'that' instead of 'a' in the first, fourth and seventh lines, it sounds more fitting.

Either way, the poem is beautiful, a tuneful rhyme, full of melancholy, steeped in olde mystery.

Well done,

Michael x

Beautifully executed with lovely nature rich descriptions. Loved it. Milly x