Comments : You Are My Flesh and I Am Your Bone

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Gel what a beautiful love piece although with a sad tinge to it. Unrequited love, possibly?

    I felt sorry every time they hurt you
    I knew it all coz I can feel it too.
    You are my flesh and I am your bone
    And for you, I was born.
    ^^
    A powerful opening. It is hard to watch from a far and see the person you live hurting by others and feel it too because of how much you care for them.

    Even this lifetime is not meant for us
    I hope we'll meet again someday, somewhere
    To God above I could ask
    To another lifetime, I'll take you as my pair.
    ^^
    I think in the first line 'if' is missing between even and this.

    I am now a prisoner because of this love
    Sitting by my window, waiting for wishing star
    I'll wish I'm with you and no problem at all
    And no one could ever depart us anymore.
    ^^
    Great visuals here of a woman waiting for her love to be returned by the man she loves from afar.
    All in all, fabulous write.
    Em

  • 8 years ago

    by Denise Jefferson

    You are my flesh and Iam your bone
    And for you I was born
    I love these words they are beautifully written, makes you kind of teary eyes.
    Yes indeed these words have been spoken by a lot of people and if they haven't someone needs to hear them

  • 8 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello Gel,

    I absolutely love the title. It is so graphic, so passionate.

    A nicely structured poem speaking of a love that is not (hopefully) not constrained to the human existence, but for the ever after.

    Well done and take care,

    Michael x

    • 8 years ago

      by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

      Well said Sir Michael ...The title alone can be a title of a horror film .....ahaha lol