Forever Love (Sedoka type)

by Mr. Darcy   Oct 30, 2016


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Forever love (Sedoka type)
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Moonlight sails across

Your flowing feminine frame

Like a lapping tide of love.

These eyes feel your pulse,

beating iambic rhythm,

singing an endless sonnet.

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michael
2016

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Sedoka is a Japanese verse form that evolved from ancient songs. They can be mood poems, similar to tanka, or they can tell stories in the manner of a song. Sedoka consist of 6 lines of 5-7-7-5-7-7 syllables respectively. Each 5-7-7 unit is called a katauta. Traditionally, the second katauta says the same thing as the first katauta, although in a different way. In modern English the syllable count is somewhat more flexible, and there is usually a turn, or change in direction, in lines 3 and 5. The turn in line 3 is sharp, and the turn in line 5 is gentle.
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  • 8 years ago

    by Brenda

    Michael, what a beautiful love poems! It flows so smoothly.

  • 8 years ago

    by Mayday

    Beautiful and romantic ^_^ You captured a moment, here. I like this!

    5/5

  • 8 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Wow, and....wow!

    What an excellent poem, Michael!! So romantic and so well thought out.

    Moonlight sails across
    Your flowing feminine frame
    Like a lapping tide of love.

    ^^^
    This has such a strong connotation of secure and everlasting commitment, very deep sentiments portrayed here...

    These eyes feel your pulse,
    beating iambic rhythm,
    singing an endless sonnet.

    ^^^
    When in love, the normal things become magical, like the heart of the other beating.

    This is the kind of verse that should be read out loud at a wedding, so beautifully done :-)

    (((hugs))) xx Ingrid

  • 8 years ago

    by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

    Woo oohhh..Sir Michael the layout is so cute... and the content was lovely..

    I like the lapping tide of love.
    you have a good Imagination sir, nice Imaginary...

    Gel

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Michael,

    Thank you. :)

    Wonderful, flowing work.