Comments : Lost in Time (a song)

  • 9 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello Gel,

    Firstly this poem reads like a song. It has refrains and a chorus, I think? If so, it's a shame we can't hear you sing. If we could though I'm sure it would be pain filled. The lyrics want to believe there is a path back to love, somehow a last chance, but really there isn't. What is done is done and there is no salvation.

    Like the song, the relationship is lost in time.

    Very good Gel.

    ((Hugs)) x

    • 9 years ago

      by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

      Hi Sir Michael,

      thanks for reading my song/poem.

      Yah it's a song but I had a hard time putting the melody...Once done I'll upload this on YouTube and put the link under this piece for everyone...

      Again you're comment is very much appreciated

      Gel

  • 9 years ago

    by Augustus Black

    This write has driven me to theme of lyrics. It sounds like that only. As usual the same fantastic love flow I have found.

    Every Segment is very nice, but I adore the first one the most. Nicely done.

    I wonder if you are on your way to sing this song.

    Ok, just this line once again. I'm not sure whether it is fitting here accurately.

    But we can not we go back in time

    Nicely composed... Have a blessed day....

    • 9 years ago

      by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

      Hi Agustus,

      Yah brother I'm writing a song and when it's done ( the melody),don't worry I'll post the link below....wish me luck hahaha.

      And about that particular line...I already change it hahaha typo error..

      BTW thanks for the comment

      Gel

  • 9 years ago

    by Augustus Black

    Best of luck . Ate Gel.

  • 9 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Gel,

    I wanted to get my guitar out and strum along as I read this.

    Well done,

    Ben

    • 9 years ago

      by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

      Woah! really you know how to play guitar?
      You're freakin fab. ...
      then you can help me for the chords that will suit to this. ..

  • 9 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    ^^
    Strum along, Ben?

    ...Is that a euphemism?

  • 9 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    No euphemism, Michael...just a simple strum :)

  • 9 years ago

    by Brenda

    Gel, this is really good. Definitely the makings of an awesome song. Well done.

  • 9 years ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Gel,
    I could see this easily being a song! Well done.

  • 9 years ago

    by Shruti

    Wow, this sounds so magical to the ear somehow! The beginning lines have left that effect.
    Beautiful :) .
    ~S