Hello Brenda,

I like this poem, you've really managed to infuse a sence of intense loss. The fact you portrayed this loss at night increased this feeling.

Well done.

Michael x

Brenda,

A very clever little write. I first saw Naughtymouse (Ben) writing one of these and I really do respect the thought that must go into them.

Excellent work.

Take care.

Brenda, this is a very thought provoking, sad yet wonderfully written piece that could be taken more ways than one if I am honest but I guess thats what great poetry it about. I haven't really seen many of these written especially on here but I guess as Ben said they take a lot of hard work and perseverance to do them as well as you did, I know I couldn't master one thats for sure.

As they say sleeping dogs are best left alone.
Great work, Em

I love this Brenda, my favorite line being the first.....Afraid of waking sleeping dogs.....
Very clever!

"Wow"...that is so Heavy!! You can just FEEL the weight in your words... x_x
Excellent writing. You had a way of really leaving the reader heavy with feeling and sympathy as well. 3:

Brenda.. WOW! This has me trying to even come up with words of how perfect this is.. Well done