Comments : Souls Escaping

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    This really is a great and inspirational write, Naomi - I hope it is nominated - I'm all out!

    Take care and well done on this; it's excellent.

    Ben

    • 8 years ago

      by deeplydesturbed

      Thanks Benny. Your making me blush!

      Much appreciated :)

  • 8 years ago

    by Brenda

    Oh N! This is wonderful! So much light and hope and possibly in this write. I love that you took your holiday to really embrace all it had to offer. Sometimes we need that, recharge and gather strength without all the emotional baggage we tend to haul around with us. I'm just pleased as punch by this, I feel your light shining throughout, well done-

  • 8 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello Naomi,

    I think you should travel more often. This poem has travel of the physical and emotional kind all over it. The only difference is you can't get insurance on the latter.

    Great write.

    Take care,

    Michael x

    • 8 years ago

      by deeplydesturbed

      Thank you Michael,
      I also wish I could travel more! I'd love to just see the whole world!
      And I think your on a winning product there, emotional insurance! Lets sell it to all the big stars!! :P

      All jokes aside, I am pleased you enjoyed this write.

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Naomi though this is longer than usual for you it kept me interested as some can be long but go off track (if that makes sense) so firstly well done on that. You have everything in this, relatability, emotion and some very good description.

    1: I liked this opening because you have optimism in this where once you weren't strong enough but now you are stepping off the plane into familiar territory its different because you are much stronger than before.

    2: I love this because its very optimistic and you deserve only happiness, so smile away and keep the anxiety at bay.

    3: Absolutely love the imagery, lovely.

    4: Again, lovely imagery of the darkness being in the corner of your mind but its a shame it doesn't stay there for good instead of rearing its ugly head time ans ago.

    5: Love the optimism here, we all deserve happiness and to feel free and live life to the fullest.

    6: Good to see the positivity here and I hope it lasts. Sometimes returning to a place can be bring back so many memories good and bad but we have to stay positive or Atleast try to.

    7: There is s time of hope yet sadness here, I feel the want to become a better person as in less hurt and worrisome.

    For the first time I am in complete control of my own mind, body and soul.
    ^^
    Absolutely love this.
    Well done N.

    • 8 years ago

      by deeplydesturbed

      Em,
      Thank you for such a detailed comment.. im glad you enjoyed it from start to end! I was worried about it being too long, but i guess it works.. :)

  • 8 years ago

    by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

    Hello Naomi,

    A sad composition but have a power punch ending

    I am surrounded by a new culture
    A place where they have a certain respect for life
    A place where there is so much noise
    Yet I am overcome in a certain silence

    For the first time I am in complete control of my own mind, body and soul.

    Brilliant. .. I liked it..

    Gel

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Welcome :)