Comments : My Mind

  • 8 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello,

    There is a lot of poetry here. I like the rhymed end lines and inner rhyme too. I like the metaphoric content that hints so well of a secret that is yearning to be free.

    Once you've edited out the unwanted characters it'll look better.

    Well done,

    Michael

    • 8 years ago

      by Francisco

      Thank you! I am barely starting poetry as a way to express my emotions.

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Hi and welcome to the site.
    I enjoyed this, those last lines are powerful.

    Em

    • 8 years ago

      by Francisco

      Hello, thank you for welcoming me to this amazing site. This was all in my mind, I am really glad you enjoyed it!

  • 8 years ago

    by Brenda

    I liked this a lot, good rhyming throughout. A lot of inner struggle you seem to be fighting with. Also welcome to P&Q, looking forward to seeing more of your writes.