The Expansion of Thoughts

by Everlasting   Nov 17, 2016


It is through you, my beloved, poetry
that I have found a universe;
one that expands each and every day
with the thoughts I never thought
I would have one day.
It is through you
that I can see with my mind.
But also, that with my mind,
I can feel emotions that I hadn't felt before:

------------------- like as if someone's touch
------------------- was cast upon my skin
------------------- even when not.

Poetry,

I dare say
that the moment when I met you,
it was as if we experienced the Big Bang.
It was some sort of explosion
that has no explanation
but that caused a commotion

in my heart...

Suddenly,
my thoughts started to expand...

[ O u t - o f - n o w h e r e !]

It's as if those thoughts
started to be like a universe full of galaxies
that I must explore.

Let me tell you,
throughout my life,
I had remained locked in my own Earth;
not wanting to think
what was beyond.

But poetry,

something came along
and it made me realize that there's

much more...

Written by: L.L.

For Mr. Larry's Space Contest in the main forums.

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  • 7 years ago

    by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

    I love this on how you cut the stanzas. .. I mean the layout is clever. ....speechless. ..

  • 8 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    I really like this, especially the format.

  • 8 years ago

    by Mary

    I absolutely love this. This piece puts into words exactly how I feel about poetry. This is a wonderful write.

  • 8 years ago

    by BlueJay

    "It's as if those thoughts
    started to be like a universe full of galaxies
    that I must began to explore."

    ^^ This confused me a bit, and it made me wonder what tense you were really going for because it changes the entire story element.

    But everything else was beautifully penned here and I especially love how smooth this felt even though there was no real structure to it (yes that's a good thing - it's just so hard to do well). I really love how much description and energy you have in this piece. It feels like I just took a journey through the Milky Way and stepped into your heart.

    Gorgeous write!

    • 8 years ago

      by Everlasting

      Thank you. You're right. Let me try to fix it.

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Loved this.

    Em