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Interesting poem! The choice of words and the interwoven thoughts makes this a smooth read with spot on rhyming. It felt like a Sonnet though if I'm not mistaken...nonetheless I enjoyed it!

Hello,

I've just commented on a lovely flowing poem like this. Like him this poem uses iambic meter and so reads musically and effortlessly. Wonderful! !

I like too the use of capitals ti emphasise the words 'Day' and 'Night'. Interestingly the use of the word 'Day' over powers 'Night' . It is like a power struggle, Night vs Day. It is like Days hold the light, the passion, the blood on the lines, whereas Night keeps encroaching on the life giving light. Although the poem has Night inducing pen throwing frustration; it is Day that wins the weight of words.

Perhaps this is a subconscious fact, or maybe a deliberate placement?

Well done,

Michael x

Luce as always I enjoyed this because its original and unique. This is what I like about your pieces because no two are the same.
When days become like night time too its time to make a change, I for one know this and though it sucks and is hard its for the best. Maybe I got it all wrong but my heads fuzzy too lol.

All the best,Em