Hello.

A poem that could create some water in the readers' eyes. Very nice mother's love poem.

Well written.

Gel this is a great write with fab rhyming but very very dark...

Em

Yes, Ate Gel.

I will certainly become a great man someday. Oh, but pls you don't go. You can't go like this... now I would be all alone without you Ate Gel..... pls. Hope I will make ypu happy with my good works. Don't leave us.

"the longest sleep" this sounds like a suicide note, or a farewell from someone who has a terminal illness.

I have often wondered what I would prefer: Knowing when I am going to die, or it happen without warning.

In your depiction, every body part gets the chance to imagine saying 'goodbye' in its own unique way. This is a clever way of breaking down the experience, cell by cell, drawing out the 'longest sleep' for as long as it tales for each cell to say 'farewell'.

Well done, Gel.

Take care,

Michael x

Crikey, Gel, apart from this being immensely sad, there are also quite a few technical terms in relation to the body (and I didn't have to google one!)

Excellent stuff,

Ben

I like it, even though it's in a lot of ways, sad. The way its written is very good, educational in some ways for you used some, well, not so simple medical words and phrases. That adds to the interesting part. Really good.

I enjoyed very much, but in me at least it strikes chords of sadness

Very sad.. but i could relate.. very well done.