Comments : My Hero

  • 8 years ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Well done Gel!

  • 8 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello Gel,

    I like this. It's unique, sweet and a little sad. Why? Because I want this to be true. I want you to fly off with your hero. You do like men in tights, right?

    One typo to mention: "I can't take my eyes off him"

    Nice work.

    Michael x

    • 8 years ago

      by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

      Hahaha you made me laugh. .. I don't like men with tights hahaha...

      Thanks for the correction. ..

      :)
      Gel

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Well, imaginary or not, Gel, at least you have a superhero figure in your life/mind! Wouldn't it be nice if there were more people like this in the world...ones who actually existed!

    Well done,

    Ben

    • 8 years ago

      by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

      Well,Wonder woman already exists. ..and that's me hahaha. ..

      anyway thanks for the comment Sir Ben :)

  • 8 years ago

    by Marvellous

    Super heroes, Wonder women; wouldn't that be a perfect world? Well, goodluck to you and the gem. Hope our Prince Charming, arrives quick!
    Another intriguing wright, here.

    #Patience wins!

    • 8 years ago

      by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

      Hahaha I like it prince charming but still wearing superman shirt hahaha. ....

      Thanks Marvs. .

  • 8 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Hi Gel,

    I really like this write, it's very Ernest and sincere, I would think about changing in the below the word "that" for "though" it might read better, but just a suggestion nothing more.

    "My superhero always saves me
    Even though he's just an imaginary."

    Ben

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Gel, sorry I missed this one. The title drew me in as I thought 'oh she has wrote a poem about me' lol then I read on and realised it was about a man, damn you haha I thought I was the one anyway joking aside, this is one of your best pieces to date, I feel as the rhyming isn't forced (not that any of yours are) and it's such a sweet piece that many of us can relate to I guess. I tell you what though Gel those fairytales like snow white, Cinderella etc don't do the world justice because every little girl wants to grow up and find their prince charming lol but it doesn't happen well, not until we have kissed many toads. Sorry I am rambling...
    To the poem.

    1) Lovely opening, we all have those fave scenes and fave actors/actresses right.. Yum great descriptions, nothing beats a man in tight jeans lol.
    2) Well, if he is anything like Robson Green (look him up if you don't know him, he's scrumptious to me anyway lol) or John Travolta then my knees would be shaking too and those eyes would be firmly on his ass oh sorry did I say that I meant him haha ;)
    3) Abit like dying and going to heaven I guess seeing that special someone looking at us too. Hey Gel, I am questioning here are you spying on me LOL *evil laugh*
    4) I absolutely adore this part, It's so sweet and we all need protection I guess. I want to be like that bird safe in its nest too.
    5) Another sweet part, I think kisses are so magical. I like the way you say your heart and mind collide with each other probably asking if it's right, if it's real etc.. The only suggestion here is ask I think should be asks.
    6) Then bam that ending, he is just imaginary, I should have known it. Boohoo. Maybe we will find these men somewhere haha.

    All the best Gel,
    Em

    • 8 years ago

      by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

      Hahha damn You Em. ....you made a comment again longer than my piece. ...I love you girl. ... well you are a hero in your own way like the one with the magic wand. ..hahaha thanks for being there always . ..and thanks for the suggestion. ... I was laughing while reading your comment ...This is the best comment of the day. .. and wait for my superman to comment here. ..hahaha hoping!

  • 8 years ago

    by Hallucinostic

    A person with strong imagination is a really good writer, that I believe. And this poem only shows that in some ways what I said was true. Another good one here. Keep it up.