Hello Gel, we all know this feeling - our energy sapped by something or someone. In this case you are referring to someone, a person who distracts you, prevents cohesive thoughts, like 'knowing what to say'

Of course, although we try to fight it off, knowing that it can cause harm too, like an addict, we can't help ourselves. Love turns a brain into mush and makes a sensible person, an idiot - well, that's how it effects me. lol

Gel, this is a lovely dedication, letting the guy know that although you've tried hard to fight it, his vampire powers have won you over - and of course no other can match the attraction of a vampire.

A few suggestions:

You hijack my brain in every moment of every day
paralysing it and leave me nothing to say
^
Excellent!

I'm planning a scheme of how to send you away
But still, I found myself talking with you anyway
^
Slight change to help with flow and interpretation.

I have the ability not to show my emotion
and even skill to connect with my passion
^
Good - just changed skilled to skill

Now, you're the one who makes me weak
I no longer know myself when we speak
^
slight change to improve flow.

I'm selfless, helpless and headless
You made me an imbecile and careless
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addition on 'an'

How did you make me think that we're congruent
And making me go crazy with your presence?
^
The rhyming end words could do with editing - or they are not meant to rhyme, then this is fine (see what I did there!) lol. I do however, love the word congruent - harmony - when two become beautiful

Let me state, that I never chase any guy
But you won, you're an energy vampire.
^
A satisfying end.

Well done, Gel. I am glad you got your man. You do know that the traditional sleeping arrangements are to share a coffin! lol

Gel, a wonderfully written piece full of quirky rhyme and imagery. Michaels edits I feel are spot on and I cannot follow his comment lol I think found should be find in the second stanza.
Take care,
Em

Love this!

Nominated.

EDIT: Apparently i am being greedy and have used my nominations, i will be back next week to nominate.

"An energy vampire"

A weird and wonderful concept here, Gel!
I love the idea of a person literally being able to 'suck' the sense and energy out of someone, leaving them 'helpless and heedless'.

Well done on this and all the best,

Ben

Gel, wonderful write-loved the concept-very cool.

You always come up with some great ideas for a poem. I always like to read something that's fresh, yes it's a love poem, and love poems have been here for ages but still, the way you expressed things here is really very fresh.
You are a very talented writer, I've said that countless times before, I think, but yeah, you are one helluva writer. Keep it coming.

I feel you are having trouble taking hold of this great sweet love. I truly adore this write because it holds some great characteristics of the subject of love. I feel great flow of sentiments and red cheeks in the nerves of this breathtaking write. Most interesting part is that you have pasted your all emotions of love from the core of the brain very cleanly.

The beginning of the first and true love starts exactly the way you have described. We humans struggle, fall and again we get up for chasing the crush. My suggestion -- Go for him, defer some respect. Hope he will coddle you in a nice manner.

Third and last segment is my favourite. It looks like hitting a home-run when a girl say I will never chase any guy.

Nice deft write. You are a talented bard.