by Kurt
I am a huge proponent that the creation of an image through the mastery of words is what defines the greatest and most talented writers. This was an impeccable piece. Well done! 5/5 |
by mossgirl19
I agree with him in everything said. Well done indeed. |
by Em
Holy sh it !! (Sorry) I need to go read this again !!! |
by Milo
I'll have to reread this later and comment again. |
by Milo
What I love about this fantastical adventure inked into words so flawlessly, is that the nature of writing such a story requires a boundless imagination. I've gone back over the months and reread this in its entirety, looking over the words again and again and I find myself startled by a pattern of neglect. I start to neglect what you write. Instead, my imagination unfolds and make your words come to life from my perspective (how I understand this poem.) words turn to color and faces, eventually into horizons and beautiful yet intimidating people. Your words evolves into a storyline with such grace, as I continue the story in my head in so many different ways. I love that you allowed others to imagine. That's the beauty of storytelling. Something that didn't exist before, flourishes into life. Thank you. |
by Milo
Oh and I just want to add how this story invokes so much thought. At first it was very hard to imagine this story in one read. Towards the end between this struggle of revenge, I wonder what a demiurge would look like? Would a demiurge need a physical body, maybe it's non physical. Hell does it even have a gender, a complex evolution that our minds and our sensory can't even comprehend? And I try to imagine where this fcuking epic battle would be? What planet or galaxy or even universe this take place? I try to think about these characters and the relationship between them, I end up getting lost in this imaginary world of yours that is trifling, imperfect and yet so beautiful. Where would a goddess of all creation reside? Is there even a throne or a place worthy for such a person in the universe? So many thoughts and so many questions. |
by Kakera
Thanks for the brilliant comment. In some cases there are actual answers to the questions you raise, but I'm also being vague with descriptions on purpose. If we're too really put a genuine Throne into existence it would be the pleroma itself, since all of this is loosely based on gnostic creation myths, where the world was created from the divine by leaking out of it with no actual intentional creation taking place. I.e, Sophia leaving, or being exiled, from Divinity itself. At the same time, the Demiurge is the judeochristian god but in gnostic myth, he is a false one, and came into existence because of Sophia exiting the divine. |