by Mr. Darcy
Kasie, this is super, I mean it! The beat is spot on; not iambic in places, but that's a mere technicality. |
by Kasie
Thank you. I will defiantly work on that. Like I stated in the pm the hainting face was unintentional, it just appeared when I centered it before posting. |
by Em
Kasie, you're getting really good at these I think anyway as I'm not sure on iambic pentameter bit the da Dum da Dum seems to be spot on. This is relatable for me as I have suffered the hands of someone I thought loved me. To break it up I have separated the lines into 4 lines then the couplet. |
by Kasie
Thank you, I tried to write this as if they were recurring dreams. I still have a little trouble with iambic words, but I feel that I'm slowly getting the hang of it. |
by Brenda
Kasie, another wonderful sonnet! You really have taken a shine to these. One typo, "To strong" should be "Too"- other than that, the subject matter was raw and I felt your fear and pain- |
by Kasie
Thank you. I have corrected the typo, once again thank you for pointing it out. |
by Naughtymouse
This is an awesome sonnet, really well written and as Maple Tree would say is a "spit and post" type of write. As its been broken down already I won't but Kudos on this write! |
by Kasie
Thank you |
by mossgirl19
I love sonnets and I am just jealous of how you guys do this. :-) this is fantastic |
by Kasie
Thank you, it's not as hard as it looks, believe it or not. The hardest part for me was trying to determine whether a syllable was soft or not. ( If that makes since) |