Kasie, I commented on this before on one note on my phone then I deleted it thinking I had posted it, durr. Anyway, this is a sad, honest, personal and very relatable piece to many of us here no doubt especially me. There is fantastic rhyming and imagery throughout.

1/ I love this part because of the imagery of the seas (and I feel these are the depressive thoughts you may have) intimidating you and I also see them mocking you too which is a b itch and happens when we're depressed. Good use of wording too.

2/ This is a hard hitting part which is relatable because in bad times we all feel like we are in deep waters, being dragged in by whatever is there and this for me is scary as I'm petrified of drowning because as stupid as it may seem I can't swim because I am petrified of water.

3/ This ending I feel is hopeful because you are trying to stay afloat and not get pulled under by these dark thoughts even though it seems impossible and with depression it does. I won't say I understand even though I suffer because I don't as we all have put own battles but that I'm here if you need a chat.

Kudos on yet another wonderful yet saddening write.
Em

As I read this I'm very nearly hearing a perfect beat. I could offer suggestions, little tweaks, but I am sure you can manage this yourself. :)

Kasie, I do love this! Its the right amount of sad, if that makes sense!
Great rhyming and imagery all the way through!

Well done!

Kasie,

I like the rhyming of this piece. ... you portrayed a sad tale here...I like the imaginary comparing yourself into a ship. ..

I'm like a broken ship,
That's slowly sinking down.
Deep into the darkest depth,
Trying not to drown,
^^^^
I can relate to this. ...We still strive even how hard the situation is....

Well done 5/5

Gel

Kasie, well done. Good rhyming and you have really opened up and shared deep feelings-thank you-hugs-

I quite enjoyed the imagery in this piece; it reminded me of the painting, The Raft of Medusa, there's a sense of pandemonium that's both innately depicted in your poem, and in the painting. Aside from that, like Mr. Darcy mentioned it could use some minor tweaks to help with the flow, but still nevertheless, a gripping write.