Whiplash (sonnet)

I totally get that Kasie.. I'm not a violent person but you just feel like going up to them and shaking them so they realise exactly what they did. Or is that just me lol

Kasie, this is rather saddening but I feel a little optimistic and inspirational too because of the ending as you know you should never have let anyone treat you like sh it but the thing is we always do at least once in our lifes and none of us should but I guess it's the way of life and how society is nowadays, unfortunately.

1/ Firstly, I have always loved the word incarcerate for some reason lol. The imagery here is fab of the air being uncaring and vile almost like a speech bubble going round with cruel words inside of it. Never let that sparkle be incarcerated for too long.

2/ Love the imagery here of the cruel name calling taking every ounce of your being because it does. You don't want to things you once loved in fear of them being there etc.. It's horrible and no you cannot forget the pain they caused because it'll always be at the back of your mind, unfortunately.

3/ We should always stand up for ourselves but sometimes its difficult as bullies prey on the most vulnerable of us and even if we wrapped ourselves up I reckon they'd still be able to smell the vulnerability coming of us lol I hope that makes sense.

Couplet/ This is a fantastic ending and one that shouts out to me "I may have taken your sh it this long but now I am taking back what you took from me with a fight." And you know what good on you, I hate bullies they ruined my school life and my ex he was a controlling bully too.

Kudos on a fab sonnet. Hope it's nominated if not already.
Em

Kasie, wonderful sonnet. Very inspirational taking back what was once yours. For someone who just recently had never written one of these you really are shining. Well done-

Kasie,

I have been away for a few days but what a pleasure it is to come back to an inspirational piece of poetry like this - and no less, a sonnet!

Take care and well done,

Ben