This is interesting. It has an odd style to it, but that actually seems to work well here. Welcome to PnQ and I hope that you are able to blossom here 0r maybe just figure yourself out a bit more clearly.

This piece tells its story in a very roundabout way. There is not a lot of emotion and there are not too many descriptions in this, and yet it comes across as a very closed off tale about pain. This made it relatelable to more people, but I don't think that was your goal.

Anyway, I have mixed feelings on this piece, but it shows potential, and I'd love to read more from you.