life, francium in action
unstable to the point of disaster
so many ups and downs it's no wonder I'm senseless
'till I see the razor blade and I feel it tremendous
I put it to my skin and let it feel hypodermis
I see the red but I feel the best of my moments
I feel pain but I rather not feel my emotions
my only escape, I use it to flee the moment
the razor blade, what sinister, beautiful supporter
my psychiatrist dont bother stopping me from it
my mind's gone, I no longer see no opponents
life's an endless road, looking for a cliff to drive off it
-I'm not too sure about this one, the wording just feels.... awkward. tell me what ya'll think
Hello,
true, life is full of ups and downs, and sometimes they become unbearable. But one should not lose hope.
It's a good one. Not awkward.
Umm, if you wish, you can try using some punctuation to make the flow more smooth. It's just a suggestion.
Overall, I love this!
Keep writing.:)