Welcome to the site.

This write is quick-fire in its delivery and almost frantic. A joy to read.

Keep posting and all the best,

Ben

Fella it's nice to see that you finally joined up!!

Listen to the other Ben he knows his stuff :)

I like the format of this one, your word choice too and the repetition (which i'm not always a fan of as it reminds me of some very heavy nights in our youth) is really well placed and not too much, it can over power a piece sometimes and make the reader lose interest but you were spot on :)

Great job man

Ben :-)

Nice. Really like these style of poems. Good job.