Though the repetition here was slightly annoying, I think that you did an interesting job of getting your point across and venting out everything it was you needed to know from this person or experience.

I'm always wary of commenting on new members poetry now for fear of offending but...this is the description I've found of this style and...apart from repeating the first line in each stanza you have not followed the other guidelines.

http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/monchielle.html

It is an nice poem as is though, so I'd suggest you just remove Monchielle from the title?