I won't Hold my Breath When Reading

by Everlasting   Apr 10, 2017


Write me in color blue
as if you were drawing to me an ocean of words
And make me see dolphins pirouette
out of the sheet of paper
as if you were writing your words in 3D
animation

There are plenty of things
you haven't said to me
And there are plenty of more
that I'm ready to submerge
and drown myself with

it's okay...
Don't hold your breath

Just write me in color blue

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  • 7 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Judging Comment: (sorry it's lame, I was just so speechless!)

    Everything about this piece is amazingly spot on. The style is creatively used and the flow of this is silky smooth while the word choice and images are purely captivating. Everything about this oozes skill and honesty.

    • 7 years ago

      by Everlasting

      Haha it's not lame. Thank you for your comment.

  • 7 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    Simply amazing!

  • 7 years ago

    by ddavidd

    I wonder why this piece did not win. If I were the judge it stubbornly would have.
    but we do not write for winning, do we.
    The use of 3D is a little disturbing, for me, in such a perfect piece.

    • 7 years ago

      by Everlasting

      Thank you. It felt really good to exhale this piece and inhale it as well. But I appreciate the compliment

  • 7 years ago

    by Brenda

    This is just visually stunning! I loved it!

  • 7 years ago

    by Ren

    Absolutely stunning!!

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