Rain...

by Shruti   Apr 12, 2017


12/04/2017
Friday night -
I traced my path down the grey street.
Flip flops wet,
and as I stepped on puddles
my eyes followed the skittering water drops
and met the black sky.

"Rain"
I whispered.
"Rain on me, please..."

I waited
as the spring air blew past
with the softest touch.
It carried your scent, did you know?
And as I breathed,
I lost myself.

The street lights hazed away...
the voices faded...
and thoughts came flooding like tears.
They told tales of tomorrow...
while I waited for the rain.

A crystal drop fell on a puddle
and I waited.

It was a Friday night.
And I lost myself
as I waited...

...and it never rained.

(edited: 12th May, 2020; 10:00 pm)

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  • 5 years ago

    by (Olwin ) Lee Mcdonald

    Such a beautiful sad write so beautifully expressed <3

    • 5 years ago

      by Shruti

      Thank you ^_^

  • 5 years ago

    by Aearion

    I Know you have more recent poems, But This one I really enjoyed. a lot of emotion in this, I often Write of rain when I wrote but nothing as powerful as this.

    • 5 years ago

      by Shruti

      Thank you. So glad you liked it!

  • 5 years ago

    by Robert Long

    Honestly I have no words to how lovely this poem is. Such imagery brought tears to my ears as I connected to this poem...very good job Shruti

    • 5 years ago

      by Shruti

      Thank you very much Robert. :)

  • 6 years ago

    by Mahal Ko Kuya Ko

    This is lovely!!! Grey streets, wet flip flops, black sky... Wonderful imagery! I can feel the sadness and disappoinment in this write, the sadness from rembering things about someone you hold dear and the disappoinment in waiting for the rain that didn't come. Am just not fond of "Rain over me... please." And the overuse of ellipsis, some worked, but I think the others can be much better without it. Nonetheless, this is an amazing write! Added to favorites and congratulations on the win!

    --- MKKK

    • 5 years ago

      by Shruti

      Thank you very much. I appreciate everything you have said. Now two years after writing this poem, I think I have many improvements to make hahah!

  • 6 years ago

    by gumshuda

    Oh how beautiful this is Shruti. I'm glad it won, this deserved it.

    • 6 years ago

      by Shruti

      Thank you. ^_^

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