Sunrise Suprise

judging comment

You take us on a lovely jaunt down memory lane with your descriptive well written poem. London’s flea markets pop into my head with all the dodgy dealings and underground, one step ahead of the law. Most of your poems are punctuated by vocabulary rarely used which always has me reaching for the dictionary. Sometimes such language can appear gratuitous and detract from the poet’s message though not the case in this poem. Yet you have certainly used imaginative flavoursome language which certainly works well in the context of this cleverly written poem. The rhyme works well but found the meter off in a couple of places when moving from one stanza to the next which interrupted flow.

Frisky moves of a black-bottom shuffle
Pitter-patter of black-boot kerfuffle
Two of my favourite lines. Well done.

WOW. Agree with Ben.P on the rest. :-)

Amazing write Michael!!

Thanks AR

Nice words :)

Just had a wee look to see what's new and this popped up first.

Bloody fantastic. Bang on from start to finish.

Thanks for sharing