Comments : Cutting edge (English Sonnet)

  • 7 years ago

    by Ben

    Hi Michael,

    I have to say that I envy you and other Ben, I have tried to write these and failed every time, kudos on such a wonderful write.

    Saved to favs for future perving lol

    Ben

    • 7 years ago

      by mossgirl19

      I agree with Ben! How I love reading sonnets. (Ben P. has mastered it). I also want to try to write a sonnet and I always am left in the middle not being able to complete anything. Kudos, Michael.

  • 7 years ago

    by CJ Maleney

    Mesmerise on mortal scars!
    Or truly dwell upon what you are!
    Will you give, or will you take
    What will you leave within your wake.

    You make a choice and I think you're there.
    I think in heart you truly care.
    You may be judged as we all are.
    A few words of hope can stretch so far.

    Regards and respect

    Craig

    • 7 years ago

      by Michael

      Thank you AR that's very cool and brilliant :)

  • 7 years ago

    by Brenda

    Well done Michael, these sonnets require something that alludes me. You really nailed it!

    • 7 years ago

      by Michael

      Thank you Brenda
      Yes certainly challenging :)

  • 7 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Dark indeed, Michael and highly relatable to a man like me. The rhyme scheme and structure is spot on but all I would say is that sonnets are typically written in ten syllable lines, which you have for the main part here, but there are a few which drop short.
    Anyway, this is great.
    All the best as ever,
    Ben

    • 7 years ago

      by Michael

      Thank you Ben for reading, and yes of course that is true. One that I did very off-hand, and didn't check it thoroughly (mainly due to where I was at the time). I will look at this again, and alter as this is important to me.

      thanks for your comments and honesty Ben :)