Wow this is gorgeous. I love the highlighting of the shortcomings of man juxtaposed with the beauty and harshness of nature. At the end of reading this even I felt ugly, but in a calm way (if that makes sense). I suppose that means you bought out some inspiration within, combined with a little bit of hatred for the way humanity is going. I resonate with this message and I think you've done a beautiful job writing this piece. Thank you for sharing.

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While I feel like there are a lot of powerful emotions bubbling beneath the surface this piece feels relatively and remarkably calm. I think that was important in balancing all the harshness of this piece out though. Especially since the title plays such an important role in clarifying what this piece is getting at without any specific incidents or names. There are countless instances of contrast and balance within this piece, which really, is what I feel is the selling point of this piece this week. It is elegant and thought provoking while still having voice and fire. Everything about this one is just so captivating, especially when you break down how precisely stunning each stanza is on it's own as well as within the entire poem. Great write, definitely my favorite this week.

Judging comment

A visually stimulating poem. I like the contrast between man and nature. I think you are one of the most underrated poems on P&Q. your poems deserve more exposure. Yes they are deep but if you delve into them they are full of hidden treasure. Well done